Until the recent GREAT REBELLION, the JEDI BENDU were the most
feared warriors in the universe. For one hundred thousand years,
generations of JEDI perfected their art as the personal bodyguards of
the emperor. They were the chief architects of the invincible IMPERIAL
SPACE FORCE which expanded the EMPIRE across the galaxy, from the
celestial equator to the farthest reaches of the GREAT RIFT.
Now
these legendary warriors are all but extinct. One by one they have been
hunted down and destroyed as enemies of the NEW EMPIRE by a ferocious
and sinister rival warrior sect, THE KNIGHTS OF SITH.
Scrolling introduction to The Star Wars, 1974
To celebrate this year’s
May the Fourth and
Revenge of the Fifth, I took
a look at the original script for
The Star Wars, an early 1974 draft by
George Lucas for what would eventually turn into
A New Hope. This
is also the script that concept artist Ralph McQuarrie read before
creating the classic paintings that helped Lucas sell the movie to
Twentieth Century Fox.
The Star Wars has the same broad canvas as
A
New Hope: a struggle against an evil Galactic Empire whose gigantic space fortress provides them with overwhelming
tactical power. A rebel princess, an aged warrior-mystic and a young
apprentice save the day with the help of two comic-relief robots and someone named Han. But
it’s not as similar as it sounds…
In the 1974 script, Kane
Starkiller, a Jedi-Bendu master who is more machine than man, is father
to “ruggedly handsome” 18-year old Annikin and his 10-year old brother
Deak. After raiding Sith Knights kill Deak in a savage attack, Kane and Annikin
leave their home on the fourth moon of Utapau, which fans will
recognize as the name of the rocky planet where Obi-Wan duels General Grievous in
Revenge of the Sith, and travel to the independent Aquilae system, ruled
by King Kayos and Queen Breha. They have three children: two sons, 7-year old Biggs
and 5-year old Windom, and a daughter – Leia, the eldest at 14 (which
finally explains why she’s a princess in
A New Hope – her father was
originally a king.)
Once on Aquilae, Kane and Annikin meet with
another Jedi-Bendu, the elderly but powerful General Luke Skywalker, who
leads the Aquilaean Starforce. Kane reveals that he is dying and
leaves his remaining son to become a Padawan Learner to Skywalker - we don't hear the term padawan in the movies until the first prequel.
Meanwhile,
the New Empire plans its final assault on Aquilae, under the control of
the grim General Darth Vader and spearheaded by the Empire’s masked
Sith Knights, led by Valorum, the First Knight of the Sith.
Aquilae receives advanced warning of the imminent attack from Clieg Whitsun, their agent on Alderaan, the capital of the New Empire, which allows Aquilaean
Starfighters to launch an attack on the space fortress. During the
chaos of the battle, a pair of panicked Imperial construction robots, See Threepio and Artwo Detwo, abandon ship in a lifepod and crashland in the planet's desert wastelands, only to be picked up by Annikin as he returns to the capital after forcefully collecting Princess Leia from her classes at the Academy.
King Kayos is killed in the
assault, and his senate surrenders to the New Empire. General Skywalker kills the craven council member responsible for the surrender, and Queen Breha abdicates in favour of Leia – Lucas later revives the
idea of a 14 year old planetary leader with Queen Amidala in
The Phantom Menace.
Luke, Annikin and Clieg
smuggle the new queen and her brothers off the planet with the
assistance of rebel agent Han Solo, an Ureallian who is described as “a
huge green skinned monster with no nose and gills”.
Kane Starkiller sacrifices himself by taking the power source from his cybernetic body to power one of the stasis packs used to conceal the two boys, and after a brief tribute to the old Jedi Bendu, they board a Baltarian freighter headed off-planet.
Unfortunately, the freighter is a trap. The fugitives are split up and captured by Valorum, who threatens to use gas to subdue the Jedi, a strategy reused by the Trade Federation against Qui-Gon Jinn and Obi-Wan Kenobi at the beginning of
The Phantom Menace. Skywalker and Solo escape from their guards, free their companions, and make their escape with the assistance of the two robots.
They steal an Imperial ship and flee the spaceport, pursued by hunter-destroyer spaceships. As they prepare to fight off the Imperial fighters from twin lazer cannon turrets, Annikin confesses to Whitsun that he has fallen in love with Leia, who loves him in return. (A wise move by Lucas to change this up - it's cute when a 9-year-old Anakin falls in love with 14-year-old Padme in
The Phantom Menace, it's a bit creepy when he's 18.)
Overmatched by the hunter-destroyers, Skywalker takes the ship into an asteroid belt* in a desperate attempt to lose their pursuers. The Imperial ships turn back, but the asteroids destroy the hijacked vessel, and its passengers board the lifepods as the badly damaged ship goes into orbit around nearby Yavin, one of the Forbidden Planets - forbidden by whom or why never seems to come up. Clieg and Leia's pod refuses to eject, so Clieg bravely remains on the ship and manually jettisons the pod, only to die in the explosion that follows.
The three escape pods land safely on the jungle-covered surface, but Leia is captured by deformed aliens who are hunting and trapping the primitive Wookees** who inhabit the planet.
Annikin attempts to rescue the princess, but after killing most of the trappers he's knocked unconscious by explosive lazer fire as the survivors flee. Chewbacca, one of the native Wookees who has been accidentally set lose by Annikin during the fight, frees his companions, one of whom picks up Annikin, and they vanish into the jungle.
Annikin recovers at the Wookee villages, and after proving himself to the Wookees in ritual combat, he heads off into the jungle with R2, followed by Chewbacca.
Meanwhile, Skywalker, Solo and the two boys have found a scientific outpost occupied by a pair of helpful anthropologists, Owen Lars and
his wife Beru, who reappear as Luke's adoptive uncle and aunt in the films.
The general and Solo go to scout the nearby Imperial base, leaving 3P0 to watch over the two princes. They encounter Annikin at the site of the struggle with the trappers, and follow their trail to the base, which is under siege by the Wookees, who have been unable to overcome the Empire's more advanced technology.
While they plan their strategy, an Imperial squad discovers the two children and 3P0 at the outpost and takes them into custody.
Led by Skywalker and Solo, the Wookees successfully defeat the Imperials using a variety of primitive boobytraps and deadfalls (as repeated by Ewoks in
The Return of the Jedi). Once inside the base, they learn that Leia has been taken back to Aquilae.
Skywalker and Starkiller study plans of the Empire's space fortress from R2's construction database - the first and only time it's referred to as the "death star" in the script - and Annikin disguises himself as an Imperial pilot and leaves with R2 in a daring attempt to rescue the princess, as the general and Solo begin training the Wookees to fly the Imperial starfighters.
The Imperial squad returns to the base with Biggs, Windy and 3P0, where they are ambushed by the Wookees and the captives freed.
As Annikin lands on the space fortress, Vader is torturing Leia before placing her in detention. R2 locates her cell in the Imperial database, but the two are separated and Annikin is captured. Valorum, the Prince of the Sith, who has somehow been demoted to a regular stormtrooper (perhaps due to the earlier escape?), turns his back on the Empire and helps Annikin to escape. They rescue Leia from her guards, and the trio is forced to escape through a garbage chute. Vader attempts to crush them using the trash compactor, but they escape after the power is cut off by damage from the attacking Wookee pilots. They reunite with R2 and once again take to the escape pods.
The Wookee space fighter assault is successful, and General Vader dies in the cataclysmic destruction of the space fortress as Annikin and Leia kiss in their lifepod.
In the final scene, Queen Leia, "in all of her grandeur" and in front of a crowded throne room, gives Chewbacca a medal, upgrades the robots - no, really - and declares Annikin the Lord Protector of Aquilae as Skywalker, Solo and Valorum look on approvingly from the sidelines.
Credits roll.
The good news is that Lucas was able to step back and take a second look at the story, resulting in a much tighter script for
A New Hope: more
dramatic, fewer main characters, a simplified plot revolving around the
Death Star plans, and a lot fewer escape pods.
It's interesting to look at how the characters go back into the blender in order to return as the principals of the final version. General Luke Skywalker is reborn as Obi-Wan Kenobi, and his name goes to the adopted farm boy who replaces Annikin Starkiller as the hero of the story.
Lazerswords, used by soldiers on both sides in
The Star Wars, become light sabers, a more evocative name for a more elegant weapon that's used solely by the Jedi and the Sith, and the force of others, a meaningless bit of dialogue in the script, becomes the Force, the energy that holds the universe together.
Leia wisely becomes a more mature princess with serious attitude, Darth Vader gains a mask and membership in the Sith, and Jedi-hunter Prince Valorum of the Sith One Hundred vanishes, only to have his name reused for the Supreme Chancellor of the Galactic Republic in the prequel trilogy. Han Solo goes from being green and gilled to human and hot, thereby creating the potential for a new romantic storyline, and Chewbacca retains his status as pilot - well, copilot, but still.
The Imperial City of the New Empire, located on the gaseous planet
Alderaan and perched on a long spire that descends into the clouds,
reappears as Cloud City, the tibanna gas mining city administrated by
Lando Calrissian in
The Empire Strikes Back. The "death star" space fortress gets some capital letters to officially become the Death Star, and the Starkiller family is commemorated by Starkiller Base, the First Order planetkiller from
The Force Awakens.
Speaking of the First Order, there's even a casual reference to a First Order trooper in
The Star Wars, without any explanation of what the First Order might be.
I couldn't find any evidence as to whether or not the writers of the final trilogy derived the name of the Empire's successor from that one line. It's not impossible - Lucas was a creative consultant on the final trilogy, and apparently shared his rough scripts for the three movies. Based on the number of things that were recycled from
The Star Wars, he may have suggested the name of the First Order, but my god, if that’s where it came from, what a small thread from which to weave such a large tapestry!
The bad news is that even after such an epic rewrite, the dialogue is still a problem. One of the key elements in science fiction story telling is the creation of a distinctive vocabulary and nomenclature that helps to establish the world in the story takes place, and although you can see what Lucas is trying to do, it just never quite rings true.
In the words of Jedi Bendu General Skywalker, may the force of others be with you.
- Sid
* The odds of successfully navigating an asteroid field are not discussed first.
** That's not a typo, Chewbacca was a Wookee before he was a Wookiee.
